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Do you ever have those days you wish you never woke up?

Do you ever have those days you wish you would have spoken up?

Do you ever have those days you wish you were never alive?

Do you ever have those days you wish you would die?

The days the madness takes over your mind

It's merciless clutches so unkind

The days you feel exposed and open

Your secrets known without being spoken

The days you feel desperate, broken, and lonely

The unwanted tears making it difficult to see

The days you just pray you forget

Because of all the mistakes you regret

The days the world turns against you just for fun

Pushing you to the edge until you're done

Until you're sick and tired of the lies and games, confusion and heartbreak

Until you're so aggravated you start to uncontrollably shake

Until you snap back, hungry for revenge; desperate for closure

Until you can't take the weight of the world on your shoulder

The days you break, screaming and crying

The days you fake a smile while inside you're dying
I know this will sound pretty bad but this poem is inspired by my lovely boyfriend. Let me explain: he sacrifices himself to make others happy. He lets people walk all over him so long as they keep a smile on their face and it's sad... I watch him kinda crumble away every day, but he's always brought back to life when the people he loves smile and laugh and have a good time, especially when he's helped cause that...

So... yeah... do tell me what you think :)
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moose-on-a-jew Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Sounds like you found an awesome guy who inspired an awesome poem :)
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you Linz <3
fucking long time no chat! How ya been?
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moose-on-a-jew Featured By Owner May 14, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I've been pretty good, glad my junior year is almost over. I only have two weeks of school left :D so hopefully you'll be seeing more of me again too

how about you?
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
uh... my boyfriend and I celebrated our 2month anniversary last week but I had to stay home sick today because I woke up and had a headache so bad I couldn't see. but other than that I'm okay. I was a little drunk on Saturday and fortunately I didn't have a hangover. Don't ask why I was drunk, 'cause I rather not talk about it.
I better be seeing more of you! D:
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moose-on-a-jew Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
You will be, I promise

two months? wow, it has been too long since we talked,but that's awesome!
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
haha yeah! And tonight we saw The Raven XD Leave it to the two Poe Freaks to see the Raven and know each and every story referenced in the movie XD
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KPs-Catipillar Featured By Owner May 10, 2012   Writer
I think that sounds like a very sweet boyfriend, and kinda like what I do.
And as for the poem, it is very well written.
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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KPs-Catipillar Featured By Owner May 11, 2012   Writer
Welcome
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Salty-Runner Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful :)

I love the last lines even though...well, they're kind of sad.
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Ikiyou Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The last line gives the entire piece the most meaning, at least, to myself.
It'd be nice to see the other side, the side where he is "brought back to life" ^^...

:hug:
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
he's really awesome when he's in a better mood. Funnier, sweeter XD
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Ikiyou Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
oh... :phew: XD haha jk!
that would be a nice poem, too!
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
yeah, like when he's not stressed or taking care of everybody else, he's a lot more light-hearted. I can tell because he's more flirty and lovey-dovey XD And I'm like "n'awwww" XD
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Ikiyou Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconturbopokeplz: nayahah
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Shadowhumper Featured By Owner May 5, 2012
Those poems, when another person can express what you feel.. and i know really well how your boyfriend feels.. send him a great big hug for being in this world.
This poem is absolutely amazing.
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :hug:
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MusicIsWhoIAm Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really really love this!!
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XxRedxRiotxX Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Student Writer
Awesome poem
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks
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XxRedxRiotxX Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Student Writer
No problem
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DragulasDragons Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing poem~ <3
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank ya, Love :D
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DragulasDragons Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcomez~ ^-^
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VampsandHumanoids Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing. I love the fact that it is also based on someone you know, too, so it makes the poem have more life to it. :)
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: thank you
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VampsandHumanoids Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :la:
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musicfreaklisa Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Student General Artist
this is really beautiful <3 It made me think of one of my best friends.. :(
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you... and I'm sorry about your friend :hug:
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musicfreaklisa Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Student General Artist
you're welcome:) and thank you. She's doing really bad right now... She wants to commit... but your poem was still beautiful! <3
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
tell her nothing is worth that...
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musicfreaklisa Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Student General Artist
I've already tried that. I've already tried about everything... but thanks anyways
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Safe-As-Houses Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hm... Interesting idea! Love the last line in particular. I know how your boyfriend feels... Remind him that it's okay for him to say no. That's one of the things I always forget, because when someone asks me to do something or to give them something, I feel like I have to say yes so they'll be happy... It gets very overwhelming when everyone wants me to do something for them and I have no time for myself. :(

Not too sure about the rhyming, but you did a good job matching them up, so it's all good. :)
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It was 12:34 in the morning lol

Yeah... That's why whenever he wants to do something for me at his own risk I say, "No... it's fine." he always argues and says, "but i wanna do something for you." and I just smile and say, "It's the thought that counts, Babe. Love you."
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Safe-As-Houses Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
LOL, okay then. :XD:

Awww, that's so sweet! Decent men are so uncommon nowadays. You lucky gal, you! ;)
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I am. I'm very lucky XD
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saskikana Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It is a gorgeous poem, really. Well written ^^
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XvictoryXvenomX Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :blush:
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